Editing Service can be useful, so we will give several advises:
More lyrics!
The lyrics grab the reader. He will be very interested to know how you came to life such as how beautiful the sunset is in your small homeland, how great that you came to Golden-domed, how you enjoyed the ringing of bells before you take up the pen. More old epithets, more metaphors and comparisons – this is sure to be appreciated. If you understand.
The more the introduction, the better
Be sure to tell the reader about your life, about who your parents were, grandparents, about what pushed you to the topic of the essay. The introduction, occupying half a text, will certainly intrigue the reader.
Talk about how important it is that you went to study specifically for a teacher, an interpreter, an engineer, a manager, in what a wonderful place is your university, office or city, how great it is if wars end in the whole world. Ask to write about what you would like to change in your institution? Be sure to tell us about teacher training and salary growth, new repair or deepening of the curriculum. Do not name any specific names or facts.